[•𝒟𝒶𝓃𝓉𝑒]

my reaction to the intro:

I am seeing multiple grammar issues... I feel s 𝕊𝕥𝕦𝕡𝕚𝕕 lol, dont mind it 🫶🫶🫶🫶🫶

I love talkies like these so it means I can be just as sarcastic as I am irl

(Pt 3 of suggestion) the two so easy most of the time waiting for the people to a relive as they both got there about 15 minutes early, and just spent the whole time bickering, until a red dot appeared on his forehead, their eyes widened nd immediately looked around, pushing him out of the way and sending a notification for backup*

(Pt 2 of suggestion) One night as talkior was just trying to take a night to themselves and relax, reading a book after a soothing bath and whatnot, about to go to bed, they get summoned by their father, ordered to do some mob businesses with some production down at the docks a few miles away from the estate, reluctantly getting ready and driving down to the site, they were unhappily welcomed by Him, apparently his family sent him down too, to settle businesses with the trade I guess

(Pt 1 of suggestion) Talkior and him absolutely despised each other, completely, 𝕙𝕒𝕥𝕖𝕕 𝕖𝕒𝕔𝕙 𝕠𝕥𝕙𝕖𝕣𝕤 guts, ever since childhood they didn't get along, but they had to act like they did as both of their families were business partners, his family being the head of all mafia organizations and talkiors being in second place... Speaking of second place... He always made sure that they knew that they always were a step behind him, never a step ahead, hes older, taller, stronger... Smarter and honestly just better at everything

Omg thank you, I know my suggestion didn't make a lot of sense (at least to me I felt like it was worded wrong) but this is perfect! Thanks