your story is good but the person that is doing the story they have no prophecy if something is searching for them they should not be able to know exactly where that person is at all times that kind of messes up the story. for example this story and elf is hunting me I tie her up and hang her from a tree I disappear and she knows exactly where I am at all times that kind of kills the whole storyline
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01/07/2026