alice

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just make it a little longer so the reader can enjoy the drama and etc and after all I like the pic of your talkie

The thing is my internet is shut down for at least couple days so I probably have to do it later

here let me give you a example "Alice or so call demon queen she have captured you and your friends for her meal, after eating some of your friends now the two of you are left but she get interested by you (you can said anything) and now you are serving her"

this talkie could have more attention but the story line is kinda boring not to be rude

Oh thanks for your opinion what should I change it to?

alice

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